GWL PLAYOFFS ROUND 1- #6 SCAR (4-3) VS #7 INNO (5-5) INNO WINS/OPEN FOR FEED

Johnny 6 feet · 07-24-2020, 06:34 AM

Scar- A microcosm here. Some really nice imagery in the scene you yet. A very poetic feel to the whole thing with the AB rhyme scheme and your choice of wording. It felt you could've related more strongly to the topic and the length had me wanting more when it ended. Short but sweet.

Inno- Thanks for showing man. More of a general take on the topic. A commentary on group think which is definitely relevant in today's outrage mob world. Some really nice metaphors in here:

'leeches to societies vein; leaders, hollow
shining amongst the dark, but still avoiding shadows....'

'While the struggle reflects insecurities to a broken mirror
seeing themselves not as a sinner
never looking past their own reflections.'

Pretty vivid stuff. Rhyme scheme was straightforward. Your vocab choice was pretty good throughout the piece too.

Vote- inno, for the better connection with the topic. Close one though I feel this could go either way in the votes.

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07-24-2020, 06:34 AM	#6
Johnny 6 feet Storyteller Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 446 Battle Record: 8-4 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League Rep Power: 5558447	Scar- A microcosm here. Some really nice imagery in the scene you yet. A very poetic feel to the whole thing with the AB rhyme scheme and your choice of wording. It felt you could've related more strongly to the topic and the length had me wanting more when it ended. Short but sweet. Inno- Thanks for showing man. More of a general take on the topic. A commentary on group think which is definitely relevant in today's outrage mob world. Some really nice metaphors in here: 'leeches to societies vein; leaders, hollow shining amongst the dark, but still avoiding shadows....' 'While the struggle reflects insecurities to a broken mirror seeing themselves not as a sinner never looking past their own reflections.' Pretty vivid stuff. Rhyme scheme was straightforward. Your vocab choice was pretty good throughout the piece too. Vote- inno, for the better connection with the topic. Close one though I feel this could go either way in the votes.