WEEK: Contenders: dead man vs Clutbuck CLOSED TBA

[Bodey]

Clutbuck- idk why, but i kept imagining the same feel of sylvester stallone's character from Antz. interesting approach to the pic, i wasn't expecting that. and as much as it was supposed to be sinister, i couldn't help picturing a cartoon of all this happening. which for me was honestly kinda cool. different. your flow was on point and i didnt see any lines that missed either, it was a nice quick little read. kinda wish you dug deeper though, like i said, it's hard to take worms seriously in a horror aspect. although, the movie Tremors falls under horror. anyways, it was interesting and kept me engaged.

Word on the peat had alerted him to a zombie apocalypse
in the offing that promises to see them pop up their coffin lids. haha loved that. the whole piece was oddly playful kinda like your golden egg entry

deadman- usual style of impressive imagery. your shit comes off as a quick list of things sometimes, it's pretty cool, like a preview to a newspaper article or something. and i'm always offered a picture and a strong writer's voice with every piece.

mother nature, pull the trigger, sing my zombies awake
jaundice and anxious. paper yellow skin a mountain of flakes

your description is strong throughout. same with vocabulary. and the ending line was very affective.

i dont like making decisions on battles like these, especially when i find them pretty even by themselves. but i have to go with dead man here, i was able to take his writing more seriously as a topic, as a whole, and as for taking something away from it beginning to end. i think if clutbuck applied those technical skills to a topic that would come across more serious, he would've had it tbh..

v/deadman