Pulling my Strings

Scar · 05-09-2020, 09:26 PM

this verse was awesome my man. my fav segment was "This was his last experiment, the great equation
All the pieces of puzzle lined for a standing ovation
He raised his hands like a conductor and began the orchestration
The cables that raised the table, a beautiful string section
Pulled to higher notes, thunderbolt's a base melody
Percussion rain to a crescendo, the prof's revelling, free
The thunder struck a final note, signal's the end of the jive
And the creation sits upright, Prof screams"
the juxtaposition was really cool. seems to be about god. i like how you liken him to a drunk lulz. i've read verses that are written from the perspective of the devil, not saying this verse was one of those but it does gave some kind of perspective, and its one of the coolest execution of that trope for me. great verse my man.

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05-09-2020, 09:26 PM	#4
Scar Senior Member Join Date: May 2019 Posts: 566 Battle Record: 7-5 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League Rep Power: 5689709	this verse was awesome my man. my fav segment was "This was his last experiment, the great equation All the pieces of puzzle lined for a standing ovation He raised his hands like a conductor and began the orchestration The cables that raised the table, a beautiful string section Pulled to higher notes, thunderbolt's a base melody Percussion rain to a crescendo, the prof's revelling, free The thunder struck a final note, signal's the end of the jive And the creation sits upright, Prof screams" the juxtaposition was really cool. seems to be about god. i like how you liken him to a drunk lulz. i've read verses that are written from the perspective of the devil, not saying this verse was one of those but it does gave some kind of perspective, and its one of the coolest execution of that trope for me. great verse my man.