Week 3: Clutbuck vs objective- CLUT WINS

[Adverse]

Clutbuck, i liked the simple narrative of your verse, it wasn't a super compelx world bending topical, it was just a simple tale but i think it was told well. And i liked how everything came full circle in the end ans kind of wrapped it up neatly with a bow.

Objective - I like your writing man but i think aometimes it is overstuffed. You fit so much into one line and sometimes it's unfathomable, it starts bursting at the seams. It all starts blending together and i think the narrative you're trying to tell loses its way at times, i think the sporadic nature of your verses pays off in some cases, but i don't think it did here. That's just my opinion, i did like your topic though and like Scar said you had some amazing one liners but as an interwoven topical i don't think it worked well.

V/Clutbuck

[Universe]

For what it's worth Clutbuck, Lars... I got this one wrong. I didnt much enjoy your topic of choice but you at least stuck with it... and after reading again I dont know why I voted for Objective here.

So change it, don't change it, whatever. But needed to be said.