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Old 03-18-2020, 12:05 AM   #5
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Way too long for my taste but gotta give cred where credit is due, and I can tell you definitely put time and effort into perfecting this piece of art. Was worth it to read it through. Dope drop, I like how you tie in the story here and there to remind the reader that you're telling a story to a girl (another funny condescending detail starting off the piece to make it sting a bit more, lol) Condescending passive aggressiveness throughout with flow and great rhyme patterns and multis made it an entertaining drop, especially enjoyed these:

I didn't need to "champ a league", I'm Tommaso Ciampa in mags he dropped
It ain't that odd to see a great white shark eaten by the Megalodon
(That's an awful monster) You take to your gene pool like a Stan to water
You're his brand new daughter... the moral of the story: I AM your father

Solid drop. Verse of the month material right there.
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