Succubi, Serpents & Uncertainty

Adverse · 02-05-2020, 12:48 PM

It's pathetic how i wholeheartedly let you eat the whole heart in me
You leech life from my veins with those vampiric qualities
If i could escape your grasp,
I'd be reborn like all the leaves heeding the call of spring
But as it stands, my days are destined to be dark like Hallows eve
You've made an army of zombies, your barbaric following
Every brainwashed body you've abducted behind you, mindlessly trotting
Staring into the preacher's eyes as he yelled "all of us sin!
But to be saved you just have to call and repent to avoid this hallow descent
That way you won't fall in the pit… well FUCK I'm already in the pit!
A False goddess gave me the deadliest of kisses you can see the venom on my lips!
You're non-existent, only alive through data on a tiny, glowing screen
But you feel real to the touch, my dear pixelated dream
"But she isn't what she seems!" SHE ISN'T WHAT SHE SEEMS?
NO SHE'S SO MUCH MORE, SHE'S EXQUISITE, SHE'S A QUEEN
She's a vision, I'm a fiend, i couldn't quit her if I'd please
Astounded how she fit inside those jeans now I'm splitting at the seams!
I thought she was manageable,
But as i dipped my toe in her creek, before i knew it i was shoulder deep
And now i fall into the ferocious sea, reaching my hand for the light as i slowly sink..
….you make me neglect my wife when you feed me false fulfillment
I place the blame on YOU, i refuse to be called a villain
But as they say, it takes a pair to tango..
You taught me the devil's footwork but It was I, who practiced till i was perfect.

Exis · 02-08-2020, 07:50 PM

Not sure why this is slept but yeah, my bad fam I honestly just seen this...I liked the imagery and thought the word usage was nice.

You've made an army of zombies, your barbaric following
Every brainwashed body you've abducted behind you, mindlessly trotting
Staring into the preacher's eyes as he yelled "all of us sin!
But to be saved you just have to call and repent to avoid this hallow descent
That way you won't fall in the pit… well FUCK I'm already in the pit!
A False goddess gave me the deadliest of kisses you can see the venom on my lips!

^^That was dope imo.

Good shit @Adverse...Stay doin' you bro.

Universe · 02-11-2020, 01:53 PM

Yeah, feeling this. Slept on for sure. Maybe it's just me but I assumed this was a metaphor for porn... could be wrong. I probably am.

Regardless, good stuff.

Adverse · 02-11-2020, 03:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Universe

Yeah, feeling this. Slept on for sure. Maybe it's just me but I assumed this was a metaphor for porn... could be wrong. I probably am.

Regardless, good stuff.

You're spot on. Lust and pornography is something I've struggled with in my life, it's just something I've always confided in, when things got bad that's where i turned for a stroke of familiarity (no pun intended lol) I've written a lot of pieces about it, people try to say it isn't addictive but i beg to differ entirely. Thanks to you and to @Exis for y'all feed, makes it worth writing

02-05-2020, 12:48 PM	#1
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	Succubi, Serpents & Uncertainty It's pathetic how i wholeheartedly let you eat the whole heart in me You leech life from my veins with those vampiric qualities If i could escape your grasp, I'd be reborn like all the leaves heeding the call of spring But as it stands, my days are destined to be dark like Hallows eve You've made an army of zombies, your barbaric following Every brainwashed body you've abducted behind you, mindlessly trotting Staring into the preacher's eyes as he yelled "all of us sin! But to be saved you just have to call and repent to avoid this hallow descent That way you won't fall in the pit… well FUCK I'm already in the pit! A False goddess gave me the deadliest of kisses you can see the venom on my lips! You're non-existent, only alive through data on a tiny, glowing screen But you feel real to the touch, my dear pixelated dream "But she isn't what she seems!" SHE ISN'T WHAT SHE SEEMS? NO SHE'S SO MUCH MORE, SHE'S EXQUISITE, SHE'S A QUEEN She's a vision, I'm a fiend, i couldn't quit her if I'd please Astounded how she fit inside those jeans now I'm splitting at the seams! I thought she was manageable, But as i dipped my toe in her creek, before i knew it i was shoulder deep And now i fall into the ferocious sea, reaching my hand for the light as i slowly sink.. ….you make me neglect my wife when you feed me false fulfillment I place the blame on YOU, i refuse to be called a villain But as they say, it takes a pair to tango.. You taught me the devil's footwork but It was I, who practiced till i was perfect.

02-11-2020, 01:53 PM	#3
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Yeah, feeling this. Slept on for sure. Maybe it's just me but I assumed this was a metaphor for porn... could be wrong. I probably am. Regardless, good stuff. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..

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02-08-2020, 07:50 PM	#2
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Not sure why this is slept but yeah, my bad fam I honestly just seen this...I liked the imagery and thought the word usage was nice. You've made an army of zombies, your barbaric following Every brainwashed body you've abducted behind you, mindlessly trotting Staring into the preacher's eyes as he yelled "all of us sin! But to be saved you just have to call and repent to avoid this hallow descent That way you won't fall in the pit… well FUCK I'm already in the pit! A False goddess gave me the deadliest of kisses you can see the venom on my lips! ^^That was dope imo. Good shit @Adverse...Stay doin' you bro.