Week 4: Habitat Vs Cashius - CASHIUS WINS

Ouch · 02-11-2020, 01:01 AM

cashius.. if you want constructive criticism your lines were slightly confusing and all the build up with the quotes before that ehh... it didn't fully connect to me

and next

Habitat --- your bar hand kind of a better flow and feel to it, but I felt like there is no punchline.. it flowed and was ok but.. no zing to it nah mean. It wasn't bad or anything just seemed pretty run of the mill generic.

vote - Cashius --- because I liked it slightly better

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02-11-2020, 01:01 AM	#6
Ouch Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2019 Posts: 5,677 Battle Record: 1-5 Accomplishments - Lost to Kill Spree Champed - Wall Talking Rep Power: 4052255	cashius.. if you want constructive criticism your lines were slightly confusing and all the build up with the quotes before that ehh... it didn't fully connect to me and next Habitat --- your bar hand kind of a better flow and feel to it, but I felt like there is no punchline.. it flowed and was ok but.. no zing to it nah mean. It wasn't bad or anything just seemed pretty run of the mill generic. vote - Cashius --- because I liked it slightly better