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Old 04-08-2019, 04:25 AM   #3
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Lars, this was incredibly smooth, and it kind of does seem to juxtapose between talking about yourself "Some label me as a four-letter word with others deriding them for it" and then speaking on a terrestrial level about a prodigal student whose hyper-aware of his own prodigiousness. Then you sometimes spin it and make this grand figure to be almost celestial and prophetic, particularly the last lines. So it kind of switches vantage point from a narrative to a more braggadocio personal outlook. I liked it, and enjoyed it so I don't really have a critique. Some of the lines were a bit mundane, but it is written in a very straight forward and smooth manner that it comes off as very on point.

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