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02-09-2019, 10:43 AM
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nok Su kow
Join Date: Jan 2013
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Class is in Session
that bolt-cutter, soul-buffer.
for the hearts in their cage call him constellation-palm start seeing stars with a shake know it's dark, but heart's the message Already been to Mars, so mark it off the checklist I can give you stars to start a necklace ..when man is thinking. The sand is sinking, 1st Eye enhanced delinquent, its, this, dance, That, brings, it. Ashes/Phenix About to flip your light on, listen Nothing's random, it's right on rhythm The mind spawn's vision That surpasses any eye-kahn's image "I've" gone missing, it's a hell of a fit for y'all What's the level? Vitriol. Once the petals rip and fall upon Your threshold's inner all Don't just stare in the abyss- Skip a rock or Swan-dive These chance-branches I'm clipping off the bonzai Consider God a fall guy for your polluted habits Confusing magick with some illusive rabbit Either you're in tune.. Or you're not Lunar-bots- gloomafied slop got a muse distraught Oh, the tomb is my yacht Useless jots knotting psychotic dichotomy when the music stops Spark doomed- cartoons gottem glued to box Whats in your spirit-bank? Better pay attention Rep is fake. Reptile-snakes trying to replicate the angel's essence Don't even know the trap that you've stepped in Pipe down- class is in session Foolish school kids have their soul gradually lessoned.. Teachers? Half of them pedi's They're casting selections There is no bigger act than elections Gotta laugh though, so upset? i poke and jest This floating web's glowing hex when soul's connect The right words can steer'a legacy That ear-ecstasy. See myself all round like theres mirrors next to me But round here, the edge is NEAT Inferno le purs, realizing this journel is yours Such internal discourse Pinballing on the path of the eternal-lit torch..
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02-09-2019, 10:16 PM
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living
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 3,485
Battle Record: 33-18
Accomplishments - Hall of Fame
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Don't just stare in the abyss-
Skip a rock or Swan-dive These chance-branches I'm clipping off the bonsai* sick. The right words can steer'a legacy That ear-ecstasy. See myself all round like theres mirrors next to me ungh. a glimpse inside yourself for the 2k19. ever-niche, always you. damn man its good to see you posting. hope all is well.
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02-10-2019, 06:56 AM
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 3,934
Battle Record: 3-3
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You opened raw...Nice piece.
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02-13-2019, 08:59 PM
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Banned
Join Date: Aug 2014
Posts: 2,956
Battle Record: 6 - 14
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1st Eye enhanced delinquent, its, this, dance,
That, brings, it. Ashes/Phenix Interesting use of commas for hesitation Useless jots knotting psychotic dichotomy when the music stops sick line The whole thing is nice and rhymey. Good stuff. I think I like it better than your new one, which I may comment on in the future. |
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02-13-2019, 10:21 PM
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rhyme capsule.
Join Date: Sep 2018
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it's good to see you're still alive.
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