Death

Exis · 06-23-2018, 11:07 PM

Contemplated ending it often
Might get a round of applause
From all my enemies watching
My biggest fear is that my haters
Got it correct,
That I'm an inauthentic loser in debt
Two personalities
the king and the peasant
I tried to kill my problems with an intellectual weapon
But my problems are as much me as Trump is a president

^^Liked it...

Some may say your lines are too short, yet the same nigga's say my bars are too stretched so it's whatev's in that regard...I actually found how you structured this to compliment flow well, it read smooth to me...some of the word usage is odd imo, but once again that echoes on joints of mine...thought the emotion was good, content was straight just needs to be refined more to resonate with people I feel...enjoyable spit Vap.

Stay upwards fam.

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06-23-2018, 11:07 PM	#2
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Contemplated ending it often Might get a round of applause From all my enemies watching My biggest fear is that my haters Got it correct, That I'm an inauthentic loser in debt Two personalities the king and the peasant I tried to kill my problems with an intellectual weapon But my problems are as much me as Trump is a president ^^Liked it... Some may say your lines are too short, yet the same nigga's say my bars are too stretched so it's whatev's in that regard...I actually found how you structured this to compliment flow well, it read smooth to me...some of the word usage is odd imo, but once again that echoes on joints of mine...thought the emotion was good, content was straight just needs to be refined more to resonate with people I feel...enjoyable spit Vap. Stay upwards fam.