East: 6. Alvin Karpis vs 8. ill nik-A - ILL NIKA WINS

Diablo · 04-30-2018, 07:58 AM

Dunno what Blue was reading this week

Karpis has a few diff good ideas but nothing that really ZINGED to me, seemed like he just dialled it in tbh, chariots was cool, i didnt get the Nic Unit but i imagine its like a neo natal ward or some shit so dont feel like im missing much. also as i read that I thought of see Nik / scenic wordplay that could have been used but thats a missed opportunity i guess LOL. Shingles again could have been so much more but as it was it just hit a little light, stick to your stomach was just okay.

Nik has the watered down concepts line that I liked, not seen that done before despite Blue's post, Gilette Stadium was cool, biter bandwagon was cool, I didnt like cans on the floor tbh seemed a bit basic but the rest was straight and more importantly the wording seemed aggressive and like he hated the opponent, that came off harsher than Karp's as a result.

Theres a few ideas I really liked but nothing to really make them POP wording wise and thats what let Karp down a little this week I felt. Nik on the otherhand had good wording despite the line lengths and it made for a better payoff to his punches.

Nik got it.

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04-30-2018, 07:58 AM	#12
Diablo Badgerdick Join Date: Jul 2015 Location: Showdown City Posts: 2,633 Battle Record: 11-2 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 22685552	Dunno what Blue was reading this week Karpis has a few diff good ideas but nothing that really ZINGED to me, seemed like he just dialled it in tbh, chariots was cool, i didnt get the Nic Unit but i imagine its like a neo natal ward or some shit so dont feel like im missing much. also as i read that I thought of see Nik / scenic wordplay that could have been used but thats a missed opportunity i guess LOL. Shingles again could have been so much more but as it was it just hit a little light, stick to your stomach was just okay. Nik has the watered down concepts line that I liked, not seen that done before despite Blue's post, Gilette Stadium was cool, biter bandwagon was cool, I didnt like cans on the floor tbh seemed a bit basic but the rest was straight and more importantly the wording seemed aggressive and like he hated the opponent, that came off harsher than Karp's as a result. Theres a few ideas I really liked but nothing to really make them POP wording wise and thats what let Karp down a little this week I felt. Nik on the otherhand had good wording despite the line lengths and it made for a better payoff to his punches. Nik got it.