Killing Spree vs bleak - Killing Spree Wins

Diablo · 01-15-2018, 06:10 AM

Bleak: I think the format hurt you here, couple decent jabs but yeah the formatting did you no favours and lead to a lot lacking impact for me. You had the twelve car pile up maybe but fizzled out towards the end.

KS: I think a few people slept on the Diaphragm/Die if ram thing but I got it. I see you're quite wordplay focused in your verse, which is good, but maybe throw a few diff attacks rather than just relying on that one thing as a crutch. I noticed Broke does similar, so maybe thats an RB thing now? I dunno. I don't peep there too heavy. Regardless, Killing Spree got this with both consistency and more creativity for me.

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01-15-2018, 06:10 AM	#13
Diablo Badgerdick Join Date: Jul 2015 Location: Showdown City Posts: 2,634 Battle Record: 11-2 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 22685552	Bleak: I think the format hurt you here, couple decent jabs but yeah the formatting did you no favours and lead to a lot lacking impact for me. You had the twelve car pile up maybe but fizzled out towards the end. KS: I think a few people slept on the Diaphragm/Die if ram thing but I got it. I see you're quite wordplay focused in your verse, which is good, but maybe throw a few diff attacks rather than just relying on that one thing as a crutch. I noticed Broke does similar, so maybe thats an RB thing now? I dunno. I don't peep there too heavy. Regardless, Killing Spree got this with both consistency and more creativity for me.