Last week's AOWL Verse : "The Innumerable Caravan"

Zen · 05-22-2013, 03:00 PM

I read this in the Closed Battles section and I loved this shit. You have a very nice way of wording shit that I wish I could do. For example:

As roots of a tree shoot , claw, prod your plot, rotting and peaceful
There isn’t a sequel…but trust, you’re not headed alone
To that deadened hole, cold as bones beneath letters in stone
Better comfort has never been known, for you will rest with kings
Your deathbed is fest-er-ing with those who died with the best of things
^^This section here is a perfect example of what I mean about your wording. It's brilliant man.

Great piece here Bent. I think a collab would be good shit after the playoffs are over.

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05-22-2013, 03:00 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I read this in the Closed Battles section and I loved this shit. You have a very nice way of wording shit that I wish I could do. For example: As roots of a tree shoot , claw, prod your plot, rotting and peaceful There isn’t a sequel…but trust, you’re not headed alone To that deadened hole, cold as bones beneath letters in stone Better comfort has never been known, for you will rest with kings Your deathbed is fest-er-ing with those who died with the best of things ^^This section here is a perfect example of what I mean about your wording. It's brilliant man. Great piece here Bent. I think a collab would be good shit after the playoffs are over.