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Old 07-08-2017, 04:49 PM   #4
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this felt like a re-introduction.

all your verses. well, most... feel like a story of your via photo album. if that makes sense. it is almost like a chain of raw imagery that you anticipate your audience to attach to something greater. latch on to what relates and sit there comfortably.

you're meeting us just about halfway and allowing everybody to jump into the openness.

which is excellent, as long as you provide us with somewhere safe to land. which you do. it never feels TOO open or TOO claustrophobic. it is still relatable and strange and sad as you intend it to be. as personal and public as you had anticipated.

thanks. post more

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