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MMLP · 12-02-2016, 06:32 AM

First half was put together brilliantly, seemingly only going in one direction, then you completely turned it on its head. I liked the spin (pun on your topic). It became very humanised as it went on, so I felt it more.
Ive really come around to your style over the past year or so, its dope! Enjoyable read!

"In her last moments, we hold hands and stare into the sunset
Its rays of light making our eyes conscious
Making us utterly aware of this moment’s contents.
Death as the biochemical curse
That slowly makes the flow in our vessels inert.
Heartbreak is the lone rose pedal on the floor,
The feeling of tiptoeing, yet still stepping onto thorns" - classic complex

not interested in the AWOL?

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12-02-2016, 06:32 AM	#2
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	First half was put together brilliantly, seemingly only going in one direction, then you completely turned it on its head. I liked the spin (pun on your topic). It became very humanised as it went on, so I felt it more. Ive really come around to your style over the past year or so, its dope! Enjoyable read! "In her last moments, we hold hands and stare into the sunset Its rays of light making our eyes conscious Making us utterly aware of this moment’s contents. Death as the biochemical curse That slowly makes the flow in our vessels inert. Heartbreak is the lone rose pedal on the floor, The feeling of tiptoeing, yet still stepping onto thorns" - classic complex not interested in the AWOL?