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09-07-2016, 04:13 PM
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Join Date: Oct 2001
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MVGT: Richard Corey
Self explanatory j/k @Pent uP PancakeBrah seems like you coif your hair in every verse. I like the intimate discombobulated interaction between your characters, though. A herky-jerky type flow. Unsettling and scatterbrained for a good portion, your rhythm is unnerving and extremely sporadic. Lots of staccato. Almost reads like a continuation of your season 2 finals verse. Honestly, I'm just not a huge fan of the quotations, but I guess I can appreciate it for the sake of this tournament. The choppiness of this piece has little to do with you ax protagonist. I just don't get all the coiffing, and quaffing. Being brutally honest here. It's not my cup of tea. Richard Corey, :). Well gosh darnet, he is is who he says he is. VOTW. Welcome to Netcees. Powerful excerpt. I look forward to our inevitable match up. MVGT: Old man corey Self explanatory
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