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Old 09-04-2016, 02:39 PM   #7
RichardCorey
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I knew this was going to be a tough one. haha

first and foremost, Pent's piece was very good. He was always very hard to digest, especially when he was younger -- and that's not necessarily a bad thing, but it did hinder him sometimes in my eyes (for whatever that's worth). But here, he's proven he's a master and probably has been for quite some time.

This piece was about a couple falling in love with a home, but slowly becoming overwhelmed by the home's imperfections and the money required to address them. For anyone who owns a home that hits deep.

But on a more metaphorical level, the piece can be about how we fall in love with an idea, but become disillusioned when the idea actually becomes a reality. Like women who go crazy over their wedding, but then lose their shit when they realize how hard marriage actually is.

It's the same thing.

I thought it was a great piece lyrically, flow wise Pent has always been a little "Penty" but that's fine, imagery and, yes, even comedy was all fine.


soulstice.

Soulstice. Dude.

I read your piece and had to lay down for a moment, shit that thing was dense, hahaha. It was good tho'. I'll say that your imagery was more exotic than Pent's, but the story was a little bit harder to follow.

I mean, don't get me wrong, once I got where you were going with it, I was on board. The idea of the weary traveler guiding his people through the desert was very Moses like, and then to find the secret cave that let him in on mankind's murderous future, it was all great.

It really spoke to the idea of mankind and just what god is to us.

On the flipside there was an sci-fi/ fantasy element that just seemed outta place.

I mean, did this dude just teach biblical era people how to build a rocket...that went to heaven?

Lol, holy shit, hahaha. That's impressive.

In the end, I think Pent was the better writer with a more concise and comprehensible storyline.


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