LITHIUM SKULL

[Sylvia Black]

hey


“ wash and rinse and repeat. you put the miss in mystique…”

You’ve started with nice flow, straight off the bat.
Nice spin with miss/mystique.

“when we connect i feel a sense of relief. Hesitantly…”

Interesting words connecting here with ‘sense of relief’ and then followed up with ‘hesitantly’

“echo, you screamed. cave-wall canopy right next to the street
mineral residue on a vitamin beach…”

Mineral residue on a vitamin beach? You’re kidding me. I like that.
Those words burst with imagery, imagery that shouldn’t make sense,
but it does. That quirky factor flavours well.

“i lecture, you lead. thats always been the routine
cultivating a paradise ever out of your reach…”

Very interesting. The dominance and certainty is a tad shocking, but…draws the reader in at the same time. Cultivating beauty she’ll never know, leaves me with a ‘pause effect’ if you know what I mean.

“feel that rumble in your feet and walk to find the machines
and once you do, you will die. rest in peace…”

Wow. I didn’t expect that lack of empathy or at least that’s how it felt to me.
A stone cold certainty comes from his cemented knowledge.
It’s eerie.

“its a lonely trek back to where we camped in the fall
its work and home and feels like something traveled abroad…”

Interesting how he reminisces and then brings up the mundane, daily, ho hum of life.
The engaging thing here, for me, is the fact that he said ‘feels like (something) traveled abroad…’
as if…it was his mind that’s got the passport, and not his whole being.
I find that detachment, enticing.

“its lithium. its chemicals the canvas recalls
when you time it right and hang it on the wall, au revoir…” –Oh yes.

I like how you say ‘the canvas recalls’ as if the person, because of the manic depression or mania, because of the need for mood stabilizers, isn’t really a person at all.
But just a canvas of different shades of hyperactivity, anger, aggression, the list goes on…and on…and on…


“pardon me im babbling on. thats the result…”

Introducing…the rushed speech. Brilliant.
I love that you said that. Perrrrfect.

“of a mountain lion trapped in a tarantula's skull -----Very nice.
the voices haven't stopped so i can use it again…”---lol. …and again…


“its darkness in the battlefield. hallucinogens
clinging to your memories like velcro and shame…”

Velcro and shame? Damn. That’s good. I’m not sure if I’m in awe or annoyed.

“kick you in the cervix. go and melt in the rain…”

Yep, there’s that Mentos and Coke effect.

That’s a sickening, serene ending.
And I love it.


Well, I have to say, this was great.
The more I read it, the more I see.

Very talented.
Honest, talented writing.

Great read.

I see some writers; including you dead man, put numbers at the end of feed.
I don’t know what those numbers stand for, but I shall put one too… the chemical element of atomic number …..

…3


Lithium is also given for post traumatic stress.
I may have to take it because of your last line.