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08-17-2016, 06:48 PM
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obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,709
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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didn't really
enjoy this. It was just too dense. Littered with tidbits of non intricate schemes and repetitive predictable instances. A lot of lines seemed stretched to try and accommodate for the lack of wording to fit a certain amount of syllables. filler words like of, off, just, my, all, and, I'm should be reduced when trying to retain a ridiculously intense flow. This was your backbone, and in being your backbone I felt you were too simple in your delivery. Nothing was imaginative or creative. Just simple sentences that explain simple things, cascade of the oceans/ wash, mad gay when you drop a display, razor sharp wit: but it off big. These were endings and climaxes that didn't do anything but let the reader down. Wasn't that interested throughout. Good attempt, thanks.
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