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The Clown Prince
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An interesting piece from the start of the whole thing.
You toy with the flow quite well & it seems quite familiar regardless I thought the overall concept was pretty sweet you had some memorable lines spliced up in there that I liked While engineers can write a program and force them to quit our ethics seem less Darwin and more a war on the rich. I'm sitting due proper with a blue collar huffing the fumes, fixing something in the plumbing or roof, suppressing moods so I can fill my supper with food. this felt nice but felt weird near the end of it all the whole nerve of fortune/butler is rude thing was eh I'm sweating. Fixing a house bigger than mine. I could be an entertainer; spitting my rhymes, or a fucking code monkey writing unequivocal lines, but I prefer to help my community on the physical side. I liked this until I got to the physical side...that is odd works with the whole scheme though. I can appreciate that it was pretty redundant to what you said at the start of the rhyme though. but I enjoyed this for being your...first drop here? no? maybe... regardless nice work.
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