AOWL Forfeit - Looking for a bit of feed

[PancakeBrah]

I've emptied the cupboards of each of my bottles, I'd rather have spirits consuming my brain

First half of this line is good; the second half of this line is bad. Spirits consuming my brain is just clunky and weird to me. Forced. But the first half is good phrasing!

maybe the habit just happened to hold me together. it's honestly fine to feel broken inside

The first half is trite; the second half is nice.

The first stanza thing was the best part of the verse. Nothing SPECTACULAR but decent writing that sets the scene. Jumping right from that into the inner turmoil and reflections on addiction, though, made this feel too generic. In my humble opinion you would have been better served continuing the narrative portion while weaving in these ideas of regret, addiction, and depression. That's a more forceful effect. Whereas now, you give lip service to the catalyst and it feels shoehorned. Any emotional impact you were looking for, and you were looking for it, is tempered pretty hard here. Some decent phrases here and there but the overall strategy was a bit of a miss, to me. Thanks for the read!