06-08-2016, 07:53 PM
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Originally Posted by Vulgar
What comes to mind: the longitude of a relationship, and with it, some of the longing for experiences through race memories. "I want you to describe that instead" was interesting because it was a jarring way to introduce the narrator as someone who is spurning someone on, who is demanding an extra-something from an entity. It creates some tension in the pi.
'Falling' is a Radiolab- my satellite shrink,
who helped convince me true devotion is
a trap into which we would think,
at least I broadened my horizons til
I saw its pieces explode into salvagable things,
^I can read your work 12 times and come away with a different interpretation each time. You have a real gift of substance on your side. This part reminded me of the video for the song 'Splitting Atoms' by Massive Attack.
Thanks for the read. Keep writing.
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Thank you friend
send me a short verse some time (:
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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah
I'm going to start off on a tangent.
when I write, lately, I feel as if I begin by stringing together ambient ideas and concepts, then i realize I'm just typing the words coffee, tawdry, and autumn over and over and over, again, then I pass out dru-
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