DEADMAN if only / overkill

[big baby]

I thought this was awesome. You fit a lot of things in a few couplets which make it that much more meaningful.

what a shame. so they say. so it goes, so we stay
overpaid, underwhelmed. overdeveloped. photo-framed
eau de strange. amor de Rey. kings without a disciple
surrounded by the panic. introverted and spiteful

managing to surround words with such intensity and precision lands to the readers hearts that much quicker, effectively.

Sometimes a playful mock by me is used as a prop. And I usually point out what the common reader may find ineffectual/disconnected.
The use of objects as if, to personify stanzas is just what does it for me. Not many, if any writers can pull this off as smoothly as you do.


palace of ivory, stone madonna. statuesque the idolatry
amethyst mirror mockery. mimic mankind melodically
staring at myself until it started to talk to me.
it's something of beauty to become a recluse
driftwood in the wind i drown myself in pursuit, and
breathe myself into stasis. static habitual mind

thanks.