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What comes to mind: the longitude of a relationship, and with it, some of the longing for experiences through race memories. "I want you to describe that instead" was interesting because it was a jarring way to introduce the narrator as someone who is spurning someone on, who is demanding an extra-something from an entity. It creates some tension in the pi.
'Falling' is a Radiolab- my satellite shrink, who helped convince me true devotion is a trap into which we would think, at least I broadened my horizons til I saw its pieces explode into salvagable things, ^I can read your work 12 times and come away with a different interpretation each time. You have a real gift of substance on your side. This part reminded me of the video for the song 'Splitting Atoms' by Massive Attack. Thanks for the read. Keep writing. |
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