WEEK 12: CHAMPIONSHIP: (c)Artifice vs. Razah [ART 5-3]

[Adonis]

Verse - Given the concept this is a very powerful opener,

spazzin' at home, havin' panic attacks & pacin' the hall
scattered moments of happiness captured & framed on the wall
these flashes of peace are just fables extracted from time
whereas the truth remains buried deep in the back of my mind

Dope read though man. Short and to the point, a solid narrative mixed in with great turn of phrase, wording, rhymes and sense of direction. This is a very clean and polished verse regardless of the length, if it were longer it would have slowed and lost it's luster.


AZ - To me, "corrupted" was the wrong tense in that sentence. Also think "keep FOR myself" sounds more natural. Great use of topic though. Solid verse about a corrupt police officer who gets a warrant on a, a very wealthy drug dealer I assume, and tries to seize it for himself but ends up with a barrel in his mouth. This verse was good man, it had zero fat and amazing character build up which is overlooked in most reads honestly. great detail, sense of direction and pace.


Very dope battle. Could go either way, it's all going to be preference based votes because you both got very high marks on any voting criteria that people seem to mention I. e Flow, concept, execution, imagery etc.


V/Adverse

I came away slightly more impressed with the style, almost like you did a razah verse better than razah, IMO only though. Great battle.