WEEK 12: CHAMPIONSHIP: (c)Artifice vs. Razah [ART 5-3]

Razah · 05-25-2016, 01:20 AM

Society's ills or rage running rampant, left for dispute
Ironic I grew self-absorbed from all the venom they spew
Not in my nature; to be clouded & surrounded by struggle
All the blood spilled runs deep - I could drown in a puddle
Hope formed ripples; although we encourage them less
Hired to serve & protect for the most worthless of checks
I'm not worthy of death - Ignoring all the blessings & praise
My soul changed hues as I succumbed to the pressure they face
Who orchestrated the pain, who chose the heavens as peaks
The composition known as my life made the melody bleed
That'd never be me. But I dug me a ditch & greed is what helps
A Robin Hood of sorts- Steal from the rich but keep to myself
A warrant granted the power & then I'd rush to the scene
The biggest hustler I knew wasn't as corrupted as me
But the money he'd bring meant all my dreams with in reach
Reality hit before I imagined women & drinks on a beach
I felt my teeth chipping -
On the barrel of his glock as I reached for my piece

timeless · 05-25-2016, 09:35 AM

Art, spazzing at home and cancerous tumor were wack bro. Other than that, and the wack approach, this was smooth and crisp. Enjoyed it other than those couple tidbits.

Razah, smooth n crisp just like your opponent. Wish you would've taken this further, really rushed and incomplete, the ending did nothing for me.

V. Art for the more complete read. Could go either way for sure.

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05-25-2016, 01:20 AM	#1
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328545	Society's ills or rage running rampant, left for dispute Ironic I grew self-absorbed from all the venom they spew Not in my nature; to be clouded & surrounded by struggle All the blood spilled runs deep - I could drown in a puddle Hope formed ripples; although we encourage them less Hired to serve & protect for the most worthless of checks I'm not worthy of death - Ignoring all the blessings & praise My soul changed hues as I succumbed to the pressure they face Who orchestrated the pain, who chose the heavens as peaks The composition known as my life made the melody bleed That'd never be me. But I dug me a ditch & greed is what helps A Robin Hood of sorts- Steal from the rich but keep to myself A warrant granted the power & then I'd rush to the scene The biggest hustler I knew wasn't as corrupted as me But the money he'd bring meant all my dreams with in reach Reality hit before I imagined women & drinks on a beach I felt my teeth chipping - On the barrel of his glock as I reached for my piece

05-25-2016, 09:35 AM	#2
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Art, spazzing at home and cancerous tumor were wack bro. Other than that, and the wack approach, this was smooth and crisp. Enjoyed it other than those couple tidbits. Razah, smooth n crisp just like your opponent. Wish you would've taken this further, really rushed and incomplete, the ending did nothing for me. V. Art for the more complete read. Could go either way for sure.