Week 9: (3-3) Adonis vs. (3-3) Razah (RAZAH WINS 5-1)

Vulgar · 05-05-2016, 01:32 AM

Adonis, you've got those good soothsayer instincts. Wasn't really a fan of this one though, mainly because you didn't mention if it was a police station or train station. Threw me off on the first read. The rhyming was okay, nothing really stimulating conceptually. I'm sure you needed a warm up for more thorough odes.

Razah - You're a natural at rhyming, something you could be harnessing a lot more than you are presently. Cool read, content was a bit 'regular' but that's because I usually take an unorthodox approach to reading and analyzing, as in you chose phrases and sentences that are customary and didn't break from the norm, persay.

Vote - Razah

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05-05-2016, 01:32 AM	#8
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Adonis, you've got those good soothsayer instincts. Wasn't really a fan of this one though, mainly because you didn't mention if it was a police station or train station. Threw me off on the first read. The rhyming was okay, nothing really stimulating conceptually. I'm sure you needed a warm up for more thorough odes. Razah - You're a natural at rhyming, something you could be harnessing a lot more than you are presently. Cool read, content was a bit 'regular' but that's because I usually take an unorthodox approach to reading and analyzing, as in you chose phrases and sentences that are customary and didn't break from the norm, persay. Vote - Razah