Week 7: Adverse vs. Breathless (ADVERSE WINS 10-0 SHUTOUT)

Frank · 04-20-2016, 02:27 AM

Adverse...
Cool comic book narration. Straight forward, edgy. Dope twist. Night and day, in comparison.Real, relatable, felt old school.

Breathless...
Brutal. Execution wasn't really there, but the premise was sick. Schemes weren't properly aligned, but I saw what you were trying to do there. Introduction is important, though it isn't a make or break factor when looking at the bigger pic.

MVGT Adverse

04-20-2016, 02:27 AM	#11
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	Adverse... Cool comic book narration. Straight forward, edgy. Dope twist. Night and day, in comparison.Real, relatable, felt old school. Breathless... Brutal. Execution wasn't really there, but the premise was sick. Schemes weren't properly aligned, but I saw what you were trying to do there. Introduction is important, though it isn't a make or break factor when looking at the bigger pic. MVGT Adverse __________________ *VETWORK*

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