Week 3: The Law vs. Breathless (BREATHLESS WINS 6-5)

Artifice · 03-22-2016, 04:42 AM

Sorry for the short vote, having to do it on my phone at work.

Both were good pieces, but I felt breathless had a crisper flow and his story grabbed me more. The law's piece was nice,but there were a few word choices I felt hurt the flow,and it's hard to do multiple 'tion' rhymes anymore without them feeling derivative IMO. Cool showing from both, but...

V/ breathless

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03-22-2016, 04:42 AM	#12
Artifice Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2016 Posts: 269 Battle Record: 17-9 Champed - Art Of Writing League - GWL Picture Challenge Rep Power: 3944949	Sorry for the short vote, having to do it on my phone at work. Both were good pieces, but I felt breathless had a crisper flow and his story grabbed me more. The law's piece was nice,but there were a few word choices I felt hurt the flow,and it's hard to do multiple 'tion' rhymes anymore without them feeling derivative IMO. Cool showing from both, but... V/ breathless