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Old 03-14-2016, 10:55 PM   #12
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Symetrik, I am unsure of who you are or who you used to be
but thats beside the fact & your style seems really new to me.
I thought this was a smooth piece but the profanity felt forced
the story is intriguing nonetheless, ahh what lovers fell for...
how twisted we are when we add another element to the picture
the first portion you shined nicely, the second & third were an odd mixture
but the ending took a few reads until I understood your wrap up
at first it seemed random but now Im like ohhhh...thats whats up
nice work...


Echo, Hello....from the jump I can tell you are focused on description
the way you focus on the lighting & colors makes me enjoy the infliction
I felt like I got lost about halfway through when we hopped across town
but as I kept reading it didnt feel like too much of a cop out......:D
(cunt with a choke) felt like it was worded a little too funny for me
yet you deter my affliction after we pass prism & ride through on horse feet
nice work here....

v/Echo, I really enjoyed both pieces but Echo left me feeling fulfilled
I felt both performed better than I had expected & showed exemplary skills
Symetrik had a nice idea working to his advantage but got out written
plus it seemed like he tried to sneak his way around the rounds limits..
regardless this was a dope battle from 2 guys I dont really seem to know
Echo just clutched it with a stronger plot with a more unique flow...
nice battle fellas...
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