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Old 03-14-2016, 06:23 AM   #7
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THIS SHIT WAS UNEXPECTED FIRE FROM BOTH, I FUCK WITH YOU GUYS HEAVY YO!

sym - Dope ass verse, loved the flow to it more than most I have to say, you've a real organic feel to it in that it comes off so naturally and that's a really strong asset of your storytelling style. You had some humour in there with the donuts line that I liked, I kinda felt the opening was stronger than the finish in truth and maybe wished you had made it longer and fleshed it out to develop the characters background more but all in all, good job.

Echo - You're obviously an alias, I'm tempted to even say Ath tbh haha! I could be wide of the markbut you def have that RSTL imagery to your verse right from the off with the sun, I generally try not to start verses off with how the weather is these days just because I did it sooooooooooo often in my younger years but that's just personal preference. What I loved about this shit is you just went on a crazy fun-filled Western vibe and your verse actually transcended the topic. You didn't just write to it, you immersed yourself in this entire world you created and came up with something original (at least as far as text verses go) that's commendable as fuck. I rate both you guys, this is a close battle and a perfect style match-up even though its coincidental. I'm gonna give it Echo just because for entertainment value he had the verse more appealing for me in terms of creativity/originality/imagery where a lot of the other mechanics and flow to the verses were pretty much a tie. There isn't a lot to separate you. Echo's "take" on the topic if you will, and him owning that, became the deciding factor for me.
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