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[Adonis]

Decent audio. You took this fast paced which is cool, but I'm not a big fan of what "sounds" like 22 syllables per line to match the beat..confusing?

I prefer a slower rhythm as far as cadence. If I didn't have the words to follow along with I would most likely miss lines do to the speed of pronunciations. The opening bar had a pace closer to what I prefer.

I like the beat though, not sure if you made it or not.


Some bars seemed stretched but you do have pretty good breath control as far as following your rhythm, I notice the longer bars but you do your thing with it.

As far as content, not goona lie bro. Some lines were a bit simple, but the topic (I assume this was a topical?) was conquered. Decent content, though, as you know I'm a fan of the more sadistic parts of writing. I think your going into more depth with the crash and blood and shit would have fit in well for both imagery and giving your closure more of a punch, because we would see the pain and you saying you should live thankful for being alive would hold more affect


Good shit overall though brother. I really really want to record, have been jonesing for like 3 months. But I'm a bum who just wants to write a dope verse, and when it's time to record I just write another one, rinse, repeat.

Amassing a good catalog though

peace bruhman