Round One: 7. MMLP vs. 10. YDK - MMLP 5-3

Woke · 11-20-2015, 11:15 AM

Short vote, sorry. Mmlp I to wish tiger would win another, this was very good use of topic in my eyes. You also utilized multi syllable end rhymes rather well. The flow in the verse progressed well, nothing forced really. Not only that, but the use of metaphor was dope and came often early on. I enjoyed this verse a lot actually. This verse was straight forward about the importance of time and the mark one leaves behind after they are dead and gone. Flow was butter, just not too complex honestly. Concept was actually a nice change in pace as usually writers see it fit to incorporate some surprise ending or twisted twist to enhance the ending through shock. Unfortunately, mmlp also dropped a similar concept piece and I came away feeling he executed on a slightly higher level regarding rhymes and concept execution.

V/mmmlp two verses I really liked, one was ever so slightly more enjoyable for me personally.

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11-20-2015, 11:15 AM	#6
Woke Senior Member Join Date: May 2015 Posts: 183 Battle Record: 6-4 Rep Power: 553418	Short vote, sorry. Mmlp I to wish tiger would win another, this was very good use of topic in my eyes. You also utilized multi syllable end rhymes rather well. The flow in the verse progressed well, nothing forced really. Not only that, but the use of metaphor was dope and came often early on. I enjoyed this verse a lot actually. This verse was straight forward about the importance of time and the mark one leaves behind after they are dead and gone. Flow was butter, just not too complex honestly. Concept was actually a nice change in pace as usually writers see it fit to incorporate some surprise ending or twisted twist to enhance the ending through shock. Unfortunately, mmlp also dropped a similar concept piece and I came away feeling he executed on a slightly higher level regarding rhymes and concept execution. V/mmmlp two verses I really liked, one was ever so slightly more enjoyable for me personally.