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Old 05-03-2013, 06:08 AM   #1
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Natural-tbh the first verse was good...u showcase a very different style and its pretty good...just was the weakest of the three verses u guys dropped...it felt like an introduction to the whole drop too me it didn't have the content the second verse which I thought was fire.i however did like the mossberg line for some reason...had some swag too it lol...

The second verse was dope and I loved the vibe that u showcased in it...like it was showcasing the beginning stage of how You became a boss which is what I would of liked in the first verse...my only other qualm is to add some Multies...it betters ur flow and u can obviously write and will make it smoother IMO...u have some talent dude and it
Seems to come natural...pun intended lol

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Man U impress me with about everything you drop...before u were honestly my favorite writer and that true emcee shit we dropped I thought u had the best verse IMO...I love the flow content and ur smooth ass transitions...and u have dope concepts and sometimes they are played and u flip them into dopeness...u word ur stuff very well which is something I struggle with sometimes and don't get my point across...

My only thing with any of ur verses is I think when u list shit it takes away from the flow because those are breath points which are commas...so u pause a little and slows down the vibe...black done this a lot and I thought it fucked up his vibe...it's dope nonetheless but is my only critique that I can point out...

I know u been in a funk but the shit I have been reading from u seems like the old geno...

Natural fav lines:
You gon learn how a boss works we toss
words
It's stronger than the kick of a twelve gage

Sometimes i felt like i'd snap on my parents and dig em an early grave
I wish someone would have came to my rescue and rendered me saved..

Genocide fav lines:
Swastika boss, holocaust, with a gothica cross tattoo on his neck
Who thinks the beauty of life looks more beautiful dead

The story, suspense, building of a character that touches ur heart
art, its how i Write the words and u relate with something u arent..

Overall:
This was a dope drop overall and I enjoyed it very much...don't know who the natural is but he was good and geno is his normal self...I liked the topic overall and was a good flex...like I said before just wish u guys would of came more direct and explained how a boss works just a tad more...I mean you guys done a great job so Im not harping on it and take away from how good this was...So with all that said hope to see more from both of u

Stay at it dudes

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