Godcomplex 6-3 vs Ullr 4-2 - BUDDHA 4-0

[Dearg]

Ullr, I liked this, from a concept point of view. I felt like the entire moral behind it was beautiful and it would make a nice poem or picture book for children. For a topical battle, I feel like it was a bit too simple. Not the concept, but the technical standing. The wording was smooth for the most part, there were a couple lines that needed revised. I mainly thought the rhyme scheme was TOO simple. It was really slow and left a lot of craving from start to finish. Overall a good read that could've just had a quicker pace. You really should consider children novelty though.

Godcomplex, this was MUCH more Topical ish. Though I feel like your opponent did a clearer job with his story, I felt you still brought a legitimate concept and lots of nice writing to back it up. Your wording was really smooth and from start to finish you maintained an enjoyable flow. This IS a topical battle, and I feel like you dropped a nice topical read. Keep at it.

If this was a children's story battle, Ullr would've won for sure. That shit felt almost professional. Though, it's not. It's a TOPICAL battle. So for the better topical verse...

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