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Old 10-01-2015, 04:59 PM   #6
Mr. J
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Flo I enjoy the quickness in which you write it adds that on the spot touch
I enjoy writing this way because it makes me feel more in tune with the verse
a majority of the time Im focused on editing my verse to make the structure come across smooth
either way I felt you started off slow & built up closer to the end, which is sad to me
I know you are capable of writing I just wish you would add more than 20 lines a verse
regardless I feel like you proved that you are worth readin when you grasp onto your topic
nice work man

EtH this was impressive on your behalf, you improve each verse
i thought the flow of the piece really showed you had a grasp of the topic
I feel like you may have taken this further & had a classic piece on your hands
I didnt really like the break in the piece I feel you could have made it work all together in a cohesive drop
otherwise towards the end of the first verse you started losing me a bit
I feel like that was a stretch for the drop, nice drop either way

v/EtH I feel like if flo had taken 20 more minutes on this piece of his he would have balanced this battle out
of course EtH came with an impressive verse this time around which will gain him another win
I had issues with some of his verse but regardless I felt like he snatched this from his opponent almost very easily
cool battle fellas
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