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Old 09-15-2015, 09:59 PM   #5
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Everything you write feels similar. It's always from your perspective, always depressed, purposefully rough around the edges striving for a woe-is-me-poetic-spirit vibe. This was probably the best piece I've read from you, specifically due to the ending like Black said. That had personality, and felt honest. The opening line was cool. Everything else I can live without. I think it'd be good for you to branch out, subject wise. Everything feels like a one minute doodle in a notebook no one will see. Try expressing your malaise through different, more creative means. Thanks for the read.
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