Week 9 Championship: Innovator vs. sraL- (Inno defends title)

Woke · 08-31-2015, 10:58 PM

Inno - Riches? Repeat repetition is redundant, it's like saying writing writens. This is a very poetical verse though. Only read it the once but so far seems like a whirl wind of ideas and imagery in a fast paced dreamscape. Thumbs up for vanity's martyr. Very deep read my man. A verse about mans greed and lust for the physical, that want for owning "bling". The begining of the verse was talking about the deaths of the souls combing and creating these cavities or mines, searching for that pay day. You brought it full circle in the end saying what for? I enjoyed this poem although I wish it had a better more well executed cadence for flows sake, but as is, the poem was spot on conceptually and executed at a high level. You gave me images from soot covered beings to "a soil of souls". Very vivid for me with hints of pure genius in terms of phrasing although they were spread out thin. Solid read, aside from the beginning of this vote and even so, I enjoyed this verse to the utmost.

Sarl - Really good opener, gave me a setting, characters and excitement in action. This verse is polar opposite of what Vator came up with. Narrative against a poeitcal concept work. The story was decent, and you incorportaed quite a bit of detail using actions. The overall message was ok. More preachy then anything I would say. Which is cool and all, just not really my style. Decent verse, but nothing spectacular.

V/ Inno

His concept piece played to my preference more and I enjoyed deciphering and ultimately visualizing his verse more.

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08-31-2015, 10:58 PM	#1
Woke Senior Member Join Date: May 2015 Posts: 183 Battle Record: 6-4 Rep Power: 553418	Inno - Riches? Repeat repetition is redundant, it's like saying writing writens. This is a very poetical verse though. Only read it the once but so far seems like a whirl wind of ideas and imagery in a fast paced dreamscape. Thumbs up for vanity's martyr. Very deep read my man. A verse about mans greed and lust for the physical, that want for owning "bling". The begining of the verse was talking about the deaths of the souls combing and creating these cavities or mines, searching for that pay day. You brought it full circle in the end saying what for? I enjoyed this poem although I wish it had a better more well executed cadence for flows sake, but as is, the poem was spot on conceptually and executed at a high level. You gave me images from soot covered beings to "a soil of souls". Very vivid for me with hints of pure genius in terms of phrasing although they were spread out thin. Solid read, aside from the beginning of this vote and even so, I enjoyed this verse to the utmost. Sarl - Really good opener, gave me a setting, characters and excitement in action. This verse is polar opposite of what Vator came up with. Narrative against a poeitcal concept work. The story was decent, and you incorportaed quite a bit of detail using actions. The overall message was ok. More preachy then anything I would say. Which is cool and all, just not really my style. Decent verse, but nothing spectacular. V/ Inno His concept piece played to my preference more and I enjoyed deciphering and ultimately visualizing his verse more.