Week 6: YDK (0-1) vs. Ullr (4-1)-- YDK WINS 5-3

Diablo · 08-28-2015, 06:46 AM

ULLR: I think you did pretty well here, it wasn't you at your absolute best, but still a very good showing.

I agree almost with whoever said you almost went the Kim route, that's what I was reminded of while reading too. The thing I love best in your verses is your imagery, you have a real knack for a turn of phrase and pairing the picture well to give the reader a great visual image of the scene in your mind. It's awesome.

So much potential in you too which is exciting to see. It's good to have you on board here!

YDK: The shades of grey/grey matter on the wall shit at the start of yours had me hooked. Really clever. The end rhymes at times felt a little unnatural and convoluted to me, which against an opponent like ULLR get brought to the forefront a bit more because of his tight knit writing.

I think you did well here. I agree with Frank saying you do have a tendency toward ending on empathetic verses and I've noticed that myself also. Still, you made this close, and the votes reflect just how neck and neck you guys were this outing. The deciding factor for me here was the slightly more polished verse schematically and mechanically, from a topical standpoint. That verse to me was ULLR's. Everything else was pretty much a deadheat between the two of you I could have slid a rizla paper between!

Close contest here fellas!

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08-28-2015, 06:46 AM	#11
Diablo Badgerdick Join Date: Jul 2015 Location: Showdown City Posts: 2,635 Battle Record: 11-2 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 22685552	ULLR: I think you did pretty well here, it wasn't you at your absolute best, but still a very good showing. I agree almost with whoever said you almost went the Kim route, that's what I was reminded of while reading too. The thing I love best in your verses is your imagery, you have a real knack for a turn of phrase and pairing the picture well to give the reader a great visual image of the scene in your mind. It's awesome. So much potential in you too which is exciting to see. It's good to have you on board here! YDK: The shades of grey/grey matter on the wall shit at the start of yours had me hooked. Really clever. The end rhymes at times felt a little unnatural and convoluted to me, which against an opponent like ULLR get brought to the forefront a bit more because of his tight knit writing. I think you did well here. I agree with Frank saying you do have a tendency toward ending on empathetic verses and I've noticed that myself also. Still, you made this close, and the votes reflect just how neck and neck you guys were this outing. The deciding factor for me here was the slightly more polished verse schematically and mechanically, from a topical standpoint. That verse to me was ULLR's. Everything else was pretty much a deadheat between the two of you I could have slid a rizla paper between! Close contest here fellas!