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This is a verse I lost to, and it is a verse I can say I am happy to have lost to. It is crafted in such a way that it depicts the world around the narrator, in a fashion that represents the pixels of his own vision. It reminds me of the movie, Pi, but with a different direction. One of my favorite movies, by the way. This movie depicts someone with an obsessive mind for finding the patterns of the universe, which he is convinced can be correlated through mathematics because even chaos eventually dwindles into order and that order can then be scrutinized and examined. Thus, giving the potentiality of being able to define it and understand it.
But, this verse also had a sense of the speaker being in awe, without the desperation that comes with the mind of a mathematician, at times, or so I've heard. I mean men of science are usually detached and non-conformists to the ways of the world. There's a difference between mathematicians and number theorists. Now in this world, there exists only numbers, at least in the perception of the narrator. Numbers are his heart, in fact, this narrator would probably try to find an existential pattern to the beats of his own heart to some kind of deeper meaning interlinking the world and him together. Like I said, it was very well done. Every word was chosen with a purpose, although one criticism I will say is that sometimes some lines felt redundant, the same meaning as other lines, but just different words, or in this case patterns. Nevertheless, a fine showing. Thanks for the read. Last edited by UnbornBuddha; 07-23-2015 at 11:59 PM. |
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