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Old 07-16-2015, 02:11 AM   #1
Mr. J
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Bro u can save ur fake personals. I'm gonna beat ur ass..
I'll hook you so hard ur 'head will be in a Spiral' like you fell asleep in class.
This week will pass & u'll stay a virgin, this geek showed me his plan..
Fuck a Gambit. Nigga ur sex life is the only thing that's gonna explode from your hand.

C'mon son. When the revolver spits your whole core's bobbled..
Call me Acura. My cylinder's leavin this RL X'd on the fuckin floor modeled

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I feel like these were your strongest bars & they came smoother than the rest
I really didn't enjoy that opener nor the closer, they seemed kind of bland for me
other than that you really connected some of these lines together & kept it lulz worthy
had you kept the same edge throughout the verse you'd have a more impressive verse
regardless, this was clean

I don't think uve EVER had pussy, man that shit is lame and tragic.
Girls rain checked him so much he followed the rainbow.. n became a fgt.
Ur not a gangster, torture him till this man is a vegetable.
so if dude caught a charge..its thru the cables I got clamped to his testicles.

Chinese? Japanese? All we know is ur Asian.
So when u act like a big baby, all we WANT to know is what's ur relation.

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as for your verse I thought these lines were your best
I understand all the discussion references but I was like eh...
maybe if you worded them properly they would have hit harder
but you did have a few lines that had me like 'ok...thats cool'
other than that I feel like you brought it as strong as your opponent

v/Remy, I felt like his verse had a better set of lines to work with
although it seemed rushed it still had some scathing lines for me to enjoy
other than that, I felt like his opponent kind of stumbled with that opener
I thought the concept was cool but I just didn't like the whole set up
and that closer didn't really make it any better for him, either way...
dope battle fella's
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