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07-12-2015, 08:20 PM
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I thought both could have come better. Buddha's verse had some intriguing imagery but I didn't understand what he was alluding to in either the last or first verse.
I enjoyed fraze's brevity and the evolution line, but the first two lines were clunky as was the ending. I have to give it to Buddha for more descriptive zeal
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