Objective vs fraze - (fraze wins)

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I'm voting cause I know how much it sucks when leagues start slow. props guys for doing this and if you feel my vote's uninformed or totally off, lemme know n I won't be offended, but I'm just gonna vote for who I thought had a more effective verse and explain it.


Rain.
It's always rain.
The rain burns and melts into my skin.
Burns and turns and finds every curve to my body;
Cool introduction, I'm interested to see where this goes

Then destroys it.
It hurts and makes sure every nerve gets hit...
(... at least twice ...)
I still know where I placed my shotty,
a sense of entitlement rush over me as I envision myself as John Gotti.
At least it feels nice.
My inner voice yells; ''For fuck sake kid!''
and my psyche got some void wit.
I like the buildup here

Yep, it's always the rain...
That emotional pain that makes the nature in men go insane and befriend friends from the past you thought knew for sure wasn't welcome anymore like Anxiety, Panic and Disorder.
that read nice. felt like a strong climax here
But it wasn't the shotty that made me lose face,
it was the rain.
It's always;
rain.

The moment I looked down the barrel and clicked the trigger with my toes I finally got a glimpse of sunshine for the first time in years.
I really like the way this ends - the sunshine/rain ties up thematically while the piece comes to a natural end. Thought it was effective for it's length, you did a lot with fewer words than I would've thought




tour de force of triumph...
stories from a world divided
where scarlet rage is intertwined with shine colored like suns- collided
in a clash of clans devising plans to seek until they find it
draped in coward's colors but cannot be mistaken for spineless
if you cant read between the lines why bother opening your eyelids?
all I hears the sound of silence...
must you be reminded?
killer assonance and I like the eye connection with the pic

shades from the past...
spectres of a memory.
a clock chime marking the pass of time and ending chemistry
between periods of disbelief and the unraveling mysteries
secret wisdom learned from all the greatest kings in history
mathematic tactics practiced just to keep it interesting
a classic masterpiece treatise- forever livin infamy
or is it simply nothing more than neverending misery
lessons we're administering...
from unions skilled in villainy
reads like butter tbh. great technical writing that connects to the opening paragraph well

plans don't always work like clocks
though it seems unorthodox
I'd rather stand on principle
your principle is stand and watch
thinking simple standard thoughts
standardized for scanning dots
while I fractal the lames... only set I claim is Mandelbrot's
infinite expansion with the gift to gab at random
unplanned so i can handle any topic I am handed
break down subject matter like the bonds were just covalent
then pull it all together like the forces between planets
fractal/mandelbrot was interesting. these two paragraphs read well but I had to take my time to figure out what exactly you were saying



man these are two very different approaches and a cool combination. Objective went for straightahead story telling and a really nice rain/sunshine theme. I'm drawing a blank on what to call what fraze did but that shit was pensive. took the topic and ran with it like that in the same way I would. seemed to have a lot more connection to the book than objective (which isn't good or bad, just an observation). definitely just my own preference talking but I'm going with objective here. Once I separated the image from the story I saw both working with it and separately in their own ways - very cool - but I just found Objective's thematic approach more effective. good read from both guys, props

tbh I think this is my first topical vote ever so dont hesitate to question me but


v/objective