Once you've hit your peak, the next year is a wash

Zen · 04-23-2013, 12:41 PM

Finally a longer piece lol. Your wording is very unique like:

Night and day, Miss mezzaluna overlapping Her relatives
golden crescent half-cousins, Solaris' spastic development
dramatic, intelligent, red hair, flaring fiery as dusk,
Evil archangel God's children secretly lust ..
a media plug that even rumors & conspiracies trust
^^After reading that opening I was hooked...How the fuck can I possibly word shit like you forreal lol.

I agree with zygote too the serious lines followed by a more humorous line made them contrast together very well and give them a more profound meaning. Nice piece once again dead.

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04-23-2013, 12:41 PM	#1
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Finally a longer piece lol. Your wording is very unique like: Night and day, Miss mezzaluna overlapping Her relatives golden crescent half-cousins, Solaris' spastic development dramatic, intelligent, red hair, flaring fiery as dusk, Evil archangel God's children secretly lust .. a media plug that even rumors & conspiracies trust ^^After reading that opening I was hooked...How the fuck can I possibly word shit like you forreal lol. I agree with zygote too the serious lines followed by a more humorous line made them contrast together very well and give them a more profound meaning. Nice piece once again dead.