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Old 04-09-2015, 03:40 PM   #5
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This was an interesting piece from you...the structure was odd
but as I read it and took it in line for line a lot of it came together
this felt like a stream of consciousness being let loose in a quick opener
I love how you balanced yourself out into two separate personalities
its a breath of fresh air as a reader to read something loosely built
then see it take form...I feel with a little more work you'll write some very provoking material
but right now your just filling in the blanks with ideas and openess
really great transitioning..keep writing bruh..
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