My brain hurts

[Mr. J]

This was an interesting piece..its odd seeing the difference with the newer piece
Seems like a controlled topic opposed to your more lyrical pieces i.e. 'Go To Bed'
The flow of this felt all over the place to be perfectly honest.
but as my good friend Geno said 'the beginning was worded funny!
could use a little tightening here and there but I 'think' you improved so...yea