WK10: NYCSPITZ (6-3) vs. Arid (1-1) [Arid wins, 6-5.]

PancakeBrah · 12-26-2014, 06:18 PM

I want to be on Pent uP's good side so I'm going to vote on this battle!

ARID-

Cool little ode to text battling/text in general. You luh dis stuff. The rhyming was pretty good. The 'defying' line was oddly worded. I think I could've done without the last line of main body of your verse. But it's fine. The relation to the topic was tangential but there, maybe? Okay verse man bro.

HANDBALL GUY-

Cool little verse about some faggot poet who misses his mom and dreams about being black. You often mix your more flowery language with slang. I think it's purposeful and makes your pieces interesting. I think you wrote well enough here. Tangential relation to the topic. Smooth flow and rhymes as always.

Close one here, dude guys. I think NYC was a bit more refined/better. But both were good!

v/nyc

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12-26-2014, 06:18 PM	#16
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	I want to be on Pent uP's good side so I'm going to vote on this battle! ARID- Cool little ode to text battling/text in general. You luh dis stuff. The rhyming was pretty good. The 'defying' line was oddly worded. I think I could've done without the last line of main body of your verse. But it's fine. The relation to the topic was tangential but there, maybe? Okay verse man bro. HANDBALL GUY- Cool little verse about some faggot poet who misses his mom and dreams about being black. You often mix your more flowery language with slang. I think it's purposeful and makes your pieces interesting. I think you wrote well enough here. Tangential relation to the topic. Smooth flow and rhymes as always. Close one here, dude guys. I think NYC was a bit more refined/better. But both were good! v/nyc