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04-11-2013, 04:11 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2013
Posts: 8,898
Battle Record: 27-22
Rep Power: 85899399   |
6-5 red glare
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04-11-2013, 04:35 PM
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Join Date: Nov 2015
Posts: 15,844
Battle Record: 52-28
Accomplishments -50+ wins
Champed -Summer Classic VIII
-Netcees Battle League
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pent started really nice then feel off for me. schemes seemed to get simplier after he went off about beach parties. the last sequence wasn't bad, not as good as when he first started off though. overall worst piece i've read by him, just wasn't feeling where you went with this. the first bit was dope though.
and red glares was all solid, slick multis, nice imagery and vocab. not a huge fan of ur verse structure it kind of threw me off a few times.. but yeah, felt the whole thing til the end. i would change ur style a slight bit with how u put together ur verse, maybe not space things out the way u do. just my opinion i don't dabble in topicals much though so eh. v/red glare |
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04-11-2013, 04:47 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2013
Posts: 8,898
Battle Record: 27-22
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7-5 Red Glare closed
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