Reign the Blood

[Mr. J]

This was an interesting piece the flow is kind of choppy at first
how you went from palace, malice, & callous was really nice
then you went back to single syllable words which didn't benefit the beginning
but as far as the story goes you have a grasp on how to structure correctly
and that helps the story as a whole and straightens out the first half
as we progress you seem to get slightly more comfortable
which is nice, either way keep it up Ill keep reading when you do