W7: Defiant (3-2) vs. [8]UnbornBuddha (3-2) [UnbornBuddha wins, 5-3.]

[Dominate]

Buddha - I really enjoyed the start of this verse, when the character is describing his awe and amazement at traveling through outer space, and what the mission objectives were... then it got too weird. He was craving an alien poop bath because that would give him knowledge of how to cure cancer? Nahhhhhhh man. I mean I could maybe get down with the idea that an alien poop bath would cure cancer directly, but not that it would give the bather knowledge of the cure. Too weird. Mayyyyybe might've worked if the verse had started out quirky and humerous, but it didn't, so it was awkward. I have to say I enjoyed the verse though - the first half because it was good and the second half because it was so fucking weird I was enthralled by it.


Defiant - very good take on the topic. I liked how you fleshed out the character's history and personality and then finally brought it back to how he just wants to watch the world burn rather than improve his station and that that's his Elysium. I saw the move recently so I knew what you were getting at straight away with that reference, but for people who haven't I think a little more description of the apocalyptic world and the 'way out' of it would have been beneficial, in place of or maybe even just in addition to the focus on the character's feelings.

Buddha was more interesting tbh but Defiant's verse seemed complete yet concise and, probably more to the point, consistent in tone/theme.

V/ Defiant